Some people believe that modern technology has enhanced sociable behavior, but others think it has reduced social interactions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Technological advances have been shaping our daily habits for over the past 2 decades. Social interactions and communication customs cannot be kept out of
this
topic. A number of
people
claim that present
technolgical
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technological
devices have
strenthened
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strengthened
our social
abilites
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abilities
,
on the contrary
, some
people
do not agree with
this
idea because of some reasons.
This
essay will discuss both
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and I am going to present my view.
First
of all, the Internet is assumed the most significant invention
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whole
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time.
For example
, thanks to the Internet, individuals are able to create a profile on social media platforms
such
as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter, and so on. Those platforms make them
interactive
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with other users,
thus
, the communication between
people
can be enriched.
Furthermore
, nowadays there is a new concept called
online-dating
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.
This
system
usable
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and easier for those who looking for their soulmates.
Therefore
, human beings have to adapt
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era and its current developments.
On the other hand
,
althought
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although
some
people
say that modern technology has decreased social interactions in terms of connections between
people
are
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not
same
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as before. To illustrate, members of society used to go outside to
hangout
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instead
of
stay
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at home and
talk
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via telephone. But it should be emphasized that
this
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a
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case society must afraid
from
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. To add more points on
this
topic,
this
is just an
evolutation
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evolution
evaluation
and
people
have to adapt it as soon as possible for their own good. In conclusion,
eventhough
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even though
some groups do not
agree
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the idea of contemporary technological devices have increased our ability to communicate, I totally agree
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topic.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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