All children should be made to wear school uniform. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today's world, I firmly believe that
children
need school
uniforms. Because the school
uniform
equalizes the rights of children
at school
and does not separate them. Wearing a school
uniform
shows children
discipline and compliance with school
rules.Wearing a school
uniform
is very important and it shows who the children
are at school
.
On the one hand, the main reason I agree with this
idea is that wearing a school
uniform
means that the children
in the school
have equal rights, and all children
dress the same. In addition
, children
begin to see themselves as part of society. The reason is that when they wear the school
uniform
, they feel proud because in our country, attention is very high for school
students
. It also
helps children
to do their schoolwork because the school
uniform
is clear and children
don't have to think about what to wear and spend more time preparing lessons. For example
, if the school
uniform
is not clear and students
wear the clothes they want, they will have less time to do schoolwork because they will think more about what to wear.
On the other hand
,does not help children
to show themselves as individuals. Because they spend a lot of time getting dressed. In addition
, children
often fight with their parents for clothes. For example
, if one student wears different clothes than the school
uniform
, it can attract the attention of many students
. This
leads to students
' attention being divided during the lesson and not mastering the lesson well.
To sum up
,I totally agree that children
should wear school
uniforms. It is also
very important for the equality of children
in school
and their behavior
. Change the spelling
behaviour
In addition
, it is financially beneficial to parents.Submitted by Premium Version on
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