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Both Rich and poor find it difficult to accessibility to university education.Do you agree or disagree

#accessibility #university #education
In the modern world,
education
have
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 easier to earn than before with not
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separate
 by any social status. From my perspective, I really agree that with there are some supporting reasons that many people can
earned
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a
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basic training and gained
a
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 same knowledge
with
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 other people in society especially in
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a high
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high
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 economic
nation
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nations
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 with can support their
citizen
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citizens
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 to gain a principle.
In addition
, Some
university
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universities
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 had
high
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 competition
to
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the
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entrance
in
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 the undergraduate level because they open
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 to all
candidate
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candidates
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 to study at their college with standardization
test
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.
The
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 great examination can filter their
candidate
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 potential. By
this
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 I mean that, If who had good
score
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scores
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 or GPAs in high
school
. It is not refer they will take a strong standard test score because the score in high
school
 with they
taked
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take
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talked
 before might be easier than others. But
in
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 the other hand, high
wealth
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 family can
supprt
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support
 their
chirldren
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children
 to take an expensive course for
tutor
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 with specialized in some major to
success
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 in their
son
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 dream.
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, If they want their son to study
a
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engineering in some
top ranked
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 engineering
school
 in the UK. They can support any
education
 without
money
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a money
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barrior
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barrier
. And the opposite way, If some people don't have much more money to support that.
The
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 will had less opportunity to get
an
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school
 target than
richer
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the richer
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student
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students
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. But If the poor had strong
endevor
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endeavour
 to do. They will
success
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same
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 as
with
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high
net worth
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student
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students
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. So
that
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in my point of view,
currently
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education
 potential are depending on the quality of basic
education
. with not related
on
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family's
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the family's
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 net worth
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