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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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There is no country in
this
world
 which is free of poor
people
.
Although
 there are many schemes or campaigns run by the
Government
 to help poor
people
, there are factors
such
 as lack of
education
 and unemployment which are adding up to
world
 poverty. All individuals no matter their race, background or status deserves good schooling.
Hence
, every country has various schemes or policies introduced by the
government
 to deal with the
education
 system for poor
people
. The
government
 has created an infrastructure to give proper
education
 to poor
people
 by charging negligible fees or no fees at all.
However
, some parents are not taking benefit of
such
 schemes. They are forcing their children to beg or sell the stuff on the roadsides to earn meagre money.
As a result
,
Government
 should run a campaign for parents to teach the benefits of
education
 and encourage them to send their kids to an environment where they can learn, grow, or ultimately earn a good wage. The other factor that adds up to
world
 poverty is unemployment. Society or local communities can help make their life better by offering them a job at their shop or recommending them a place where hiring is taking place.
Government
 should
also
 offer help in
this
 matter by giving tax benefits to the companies hiring underprivileged
people
 or maybe by reserving a special quota in their sector solely for the poor. In a nutshell, poor
people
 are part of our community and should be supported fully by everyone in the country to make
this
world
 a better place to live.
Government
 should be given all the financial support to underprivileged
people
 in terms of
education
 and employment to make their life
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