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Many newspapers print news information about private life of famous people. Why do they do it? What effect does it have on famous people?

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Nowadays, there are lots of tabloids which are prying into the
lives
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 of famous personalities.
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, many
people
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 believe that celebrities
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 as artists, singers or athletes tend to be in the public eye. In
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 is interested in celebrities and
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 I will discuss the impacts of the
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 on famous private
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.
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 of all, many young generations like to intrude into artists'
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 and their habits.
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, many magazines tend to publish coverage of celebrities in order to boost their sales. Not only,
this
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 news can generate more funds for the press, but
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 their fans will increase.
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, many newspapers are being paid to spread rumours about celebs' private
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such
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 as their marriages and their friendship, Since fame is ephemeral and can’t
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 forever.
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, many actors might hire paparazzi in order to appear in the headlines. As far as I am concerned, both the press and well-known
people
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 have benefits for each other.
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, many
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 don’t like politicians or superstars to suffer from stalkers.
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, many families'
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 are on the rocks and encountering problems just because of a rumour.
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,
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 who may oppose tabloids, believe that the privacy of famous
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 is ruined by journalism.
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, another disadvantage of being famous is that you are dependent on social
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, as your fans would like to emerge in your life. To sum up, I agree with
people
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 who claim that the press has lots of drawbacks for prominent
people
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.
Although
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, we shouldn’t ignore the fact that many
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 couldn’t obtain fame
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 if there were no
media
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