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Young people are more likely to be involved in car accidents, therefore the legal driving age should be raised to 22 years old. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #car #accidents #age #years
For the past two to three decades it has been seen that
students
 get a year off after completing their school and before going to university.
However
, is
this
 development positive or their more drawbacks than advantages? I will explore the pros and cons of the trend to take leave for a year between studies and try to draw some conclusions. I will start by looking at the
first
 plus point of
this
 development is that
students
 get a break after their boring and tiring school period and explore different aspects of society. By exploring different aspects of society at
this
 age of life some of them become great achievers in their upcoming education life.
Secondly
,
this
 is the perfect time for their outing and exploring different cultures because after higher education they need to go survival in
this
 society. Some American studies find that 80% of American
students
 went to other countries for their summer vacations after school age.
On the other hand
, some researchers found that after that much discontinuity in education periods, many
students
 never continue their studies because they find some other interest.
This
 is one of the major reasons for the decline in the literacy rate.
Furthermore
, it has been observing
students
 who go for long trips fall into criminal activities that cause high crime rates in the community. To conclude there are both positive and negative aspects of
this
 trend. I believe the disadvantages of these trends have a solid impact on the community than advantage because it causes a high crime rate and a low literacy rate.
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