Some people ink that a sense of competition in children should be caltenged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful balts.Dive both the views and give your own opinion.

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We live in an age when many experts claim that a sense of
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among children should rise,
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meanwhile other
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thought that
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must cooperate with others to reach the target
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my ,mind each opinion has positive and negative sides which let
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believe them.
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with, working in a team means that undergraduates
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together on some projects with other students. It has many benefits sides like finishing
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fast in a short time or working with others may increase the level of social skills allows us to think that cooperating with some
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makes it better than working alone and being in
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with other children.
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, in a country like China, the government made a law which led to the teachers doing more tasks for
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which
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them
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together to do an exercise.
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, China was placed in
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place among the world from most effective working students.
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, doing a task alone is better than working together and the reason that it is better is a
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which let
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work
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more effectively than others, like ,
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they will increase their level of working skills. In
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kids
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always won't be better than their competitors and to get a goal, they will
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harder,
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the result will be good for children.
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, in Germany was a test which let the
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know, how the
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will affect the students. The result of the test had been shown that every kid who works alone does a task better than
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who
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with other. Taking everything into consideration, letting the
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work
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alone or do an exercise together, is the parent’s choice, but every way of working has good and bad sides for everyone.
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