Some people ink that a sense of competition in children should be caltenged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful balts.Dive both the views and give your own opinion.

We live in an age when many experts claim that a sense of
competition
among children should rise,
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meanwhile other
people
thought that
kids
must cooperate with others to reach the target
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my ,mind each opinion has positive and negative sides which let
people
believe them.
To begin
with, working in a team means that undergraduates
work
together on some projects with other students. It has many benefits sides like finishing
work
fast in a short time or working with others may increase the level of social skills allows us to think that cooperating with some
people
makes it better than working alone and being in
competition
with other children.
For instance
, in a country like China, the government made a law which led to the teachers doing more tasks for
kids
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them
work
together to do an exercise.
As a result
, China was placed in
first
place among the world from most effective working students.
On the other hand
, doing a task alone is better than working together and the reason that it is better is a
competition
which let
kids
work
more effectively than others, like ,
this
they will increase their level of working skills. In
competition
kids
always won't be better than their competitors and to get a goal, they will
work
harder,
hence
the result will be good for children.
For example
, in Germany was a test which let the
people
know, how the
competition
will affect the students. The result of the test had been shown that every kid who works alone does a task better than
kids
who
work
with other. Taking everything into consideration, letting the
kids
work
alone or do an exercise together, is the parent’s choice, but every way of working has good and bad sides for everyone.
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