In today's busy world, maintaining a good work-life balance has become increasingly difficult for many people. What are the main reasons for this problem? What solutions can help people achieve a better work-life balance?
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2Your essay addresses the topic directly and demonstrates a clear understanding of the issues surrounding work-life balance.
You have made an effort to structure your paragraphs clearly, each addressing a specific point regarding the challenges of work-life balance.
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2Consider providing a clearer outline of your arguments in the introduction to enhance the logical flow of ideas. This helps guide the reader more effectively.
While the examples you provided are relevant, adding more specific data or studies could strengthen your arguments further and provide clearer support for your claims.
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