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Many people feel that media coverage has become increasingly biased today. Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem?

#people #media #coverage
Nowadays, most
of
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people believe that mass
media
 has become biased and does not represent the actual
information
. The main reason for
this
 is
government
 pressure and
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 solution is the special rights and protection for the
media
 people and journalists. It is not a secret for anyone that mass
media
 represents
information
 only beneficial to the state and political parties, because of the authority
among
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 society. By
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 I mean that they put pressure on news channels so that they show only
positive
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 sides of the event.
For example
, in my country almost all the news channels hide negative
information
, misinforming us about
actual
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, due to the fact that the
government
 always keeps the
media
 under surveillance so as not to raise a stir
among
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 society.
Therefore
, if there is an issue,
then
 there is a possible solution. In
this
 case,
media
 people and journalists should be
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 freedom in getting and representing any
information
. To be more precise, they need to have
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special rights,
such
 as inviolability, and in case of threats from
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the government
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government
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 they should get
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protection from
police
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.
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 great example is Scandinavian countries, which occupy the top 5 countries on the press freedom index. 
This
 suggests that journalists have every right to represent actual
information
 about happened events  In conclusion, if the mass
media
 becomes biased because of
the
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government
 pressure,
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society will be misinformed about actual events.
Сonsequently
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Consequently
, efforts should be made to prevent it.
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