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Some people think that it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered by some that knowledge of parenting at a young age when they are at school will help them.In
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 care and the importance of taking care of younger or meeker persons might help the student to be more kind to one another.As I'm concerned,it would be effective to teach higher secondary students as they have the maturity to understand the responsibility of the parents.
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 consider the teaching about caretaking will surely develop a characteristic of being responsible and caring for younger people or the helpless public in a more generous manner.
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, when a student or young
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 understands how a good bringing would be, they will definitely bring acceptable changes into their lives and invoke a kinder attitude towards their younger siblings. When a
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 is thought about parenting they tend to understand the elder's directions better and develop a habit of obedience.In
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 ,way it will help a mother or a father
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 to manage their children and daily chores in a balanced way.
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,It is believed that Jesus,who is well known as a god of the Christian community,used to work for his parents until he come to an age.Ergo ,if a
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 develops a helping nature towards their parents, they are expected to be helpful to others too.
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 way training well-doing parenting style will help the children be better persons in their life.
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 children will develop a soft cornered heart by which they make society a better place to live
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 of
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 we can expect a bright future and good-natured citizens for the Country.To illustrate, Mother Teresa would be a good example of building a good society around her for which she was even recognised with a Nobel prize. In my view, the idea of training a
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 with parenting skills would not just help them individual level
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 as growing a good nature but
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 helps in improving society.
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