Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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more
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up because the influence of
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is huge for the user that
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can provide
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addiction syndrome. One
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in
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a student
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negative
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to get
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it can be any kind of work that
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be plagiarism by
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system.
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, a bunch of science
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user
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users
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.
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is
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in some
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that
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positive influence.
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disadvantage
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it is better
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people who
use
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a computer
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computer
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with a limit and
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, so they can prevent
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the
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by using
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