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Write about the following topic. Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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As the world is very competitive and yet challenging for
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 to live in. A majority of individuals hold a view that they are reluctant to
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 and they need to stay in their comfort zone, while others believe that having a
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 in
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 will bring remarkable experiences. The following paragraphs will
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 illustrate both viewpoints with my opinion. Today, a plethora of
people
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 are scared to make a
change
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 in their
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 because they hesitate that all the things they have achieved throughout their lives will be lost.
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,
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 will have to face financial burdens, especially families who are having one source of income.
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, changing their
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 structure will eventually damage their work
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. As an example, an employee who is working for the company for 10 years will not
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 his or her
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 until they retire because they feel secure in the company. Furthermost,
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 just don’t drop out of the
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 because experience accumulated through the years to get another
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.
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, I believe that changes are unavoidable in our society. Individuals need to accept challenges in their lives
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 changing their lifestyle, jobs may bring positives as well as negatives. Some may get a
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 better than the previous one. As an example, when our skills are module enough and we have experience in a certain
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 field we have to try out different positions. It may be a failure in the beginning but eventually, we can gain benefits in the future.
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, if
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 want to have experiences in their
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 they have to
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 their routines. In conclusion, my opinion is that
people
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 have to have a
change
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 which will bring them benefits. Doing the same task in our
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 won't give us
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 experiences and
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 makes
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 bored.
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