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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to ve this problem?

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The graph illustrates the information about the nations for the production and consumption of power in 2014. From an overall perspective, the top two countries have surpassed others almost four times or five times. Looking at the bar chart in more detail, we can see the No. 1 nation for using and making power is China, which
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 stands at 5,322 and 5,398 billion kWh.
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, United States, the number of producing electric sources is 4,099 and applying is 3,866.
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, in Russia, which is much lower than the previous value, the total
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 in 2014 is production for 1,057 and consumption for 1,038. The fourth is Japan having close
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 936.2 for making and 856.7 for using. The fifth is India, there are almost 200 billion kWh between the two figures, producing 871 and applying 698.8. Canada is sixth, the total
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 is 618.9 for production and 499.9 for consumption. The quality from seventh to tenth are all below 600 billion kWh, which include and Korea, Rep France, Brazil, Germany.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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