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Many people consider that increasing the age at which people can get driving licenses can improve road safety

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Many
people
 consider that increasing the
age
 at which
people
 can get driving licenses can improve road safety.
This
 might prevent some
accidents
 from happening due to the experience but I strongly believe there is a better way than
this
. The main point of raising the
age
 at which
people
 can drive is to reduce the number of car
accidents
 due to inexperience.There are a number of reasons why a 16-year-old teenager driving a car can lead to an accident.As we know, teenagers around that
age
 like to test things they haven't experienced before.Like driving a car or even smoking and drinking. Some teenagers are unaware of the dangers which might happen if they drink and drive at the same time and
then
 some
accidents
 happen.
However
,these teenagers are really rare and they are really aware of those kinds of danger.I believe these kinds of opinions occur from one or two
accidents
 of
this
 kind and
people
 started thinking that we should increase the legal
age
 for driving cars.It might reduce
accidents
 but it is still insignificant.There are more factors that lead to
accidents
 than just inexperience.Like,
such
 rough roads,traffic,and so on.So I believe we should start with improving public transport to lead to less traffic. In conclusion,I believe it is the poorly built rough roads and traffic and so on are the main factors leading to the accident.
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