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Ownership of mobile phones has risen dramatically in recent years despite the potentially harmful effects they may have on our health and society. Governments should introduce measures to restrict ownership of mobile phones to those who need them for their work. To what extent fo you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
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 modern day and age, humans spend most, if not all their time around electronic devices, whether at work or at home. One of the electronic devices which we often keep in closest proximity to ourselves is none other than the mobile phone.
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, there
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 been concerns over the significant rise in ownership of mobile
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 lately which might have potentially harmful effects on the
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 of humans as well as society as a whole.
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, should the government make the leap to restrict ownership of mobile
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 only to those who
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 them for work?
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 and foremost, it is undeniable that by taking the step in restricting
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, the government would
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 be combating social media addiction, which has been strongly linked to the spike in cases of anxiety and depression in younger generations.
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 carries many benefits, especially in enhancing
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 by preventing
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, promoting exercise, as well as cultivating good mental
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 among people of all ages. One of the greatest boosts in mental
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 provided by real-life social interactions
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 as simply chatting with a loved one or even getting back in touch with a
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 friend. Socialising can significantly strengthen the bonds between people and create long-lasting and memorable relationships. Other than that, mobile phone restriction can serve as protection against online scams and malware which in reality has been the tragic downfall of many of its victims. It is
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 a distraction to drivers and has resulted in an increase in road accidents resulting from
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 of mobile
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 when driving, which could have been easily prevented.
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, mobile
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 are convenient as they provide faster communication and can be handy during emergencies. It may even be able to be the determining factor in a
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 situation where every
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 counts. Mobile
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 can save time, energy and transportation costs by reducing the need to travel for brief meet-ups with family or friends.
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, it reduces carbon footprint and emission of
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 gases with the usage of more online platforms
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 as zoom and google meet. In short, it is very clear that both arguments with or against
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the restriction
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 of mobile
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 bring up different points that carry much importance each to a certain extent. But I personally believe that restricting ownership of mobile
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 to those who
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 them for work only can considerably bring more benefits towards the people and society than
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, despite the slight inconvenience.

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