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Some people believe more actions can be taken to prevent crime, while others think that little can be done. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that more deeds can be done to stop criminal activities, whereas, others believe that nothing much can be done to curb illegal acts.
This
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 essay will cover both points of view and my perspective.
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 with, more initiatives could be taken to raise awareness with a view to ceasing unlawful acts, especially online crimes. With the advent of technology, hacking has become a severe crime committed quite often nowadays. The government should educate the general public on common scamming techniques used by hackers, especially in the banking industry.
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, poverty is
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 one of the main reasons for people to violate laws.
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, most unemployed individuals choose to rob others in order to pay for necessities, accommodation or health medications. The government should create more jobs and increase the quality of life of citizens in order to reduce crime related to poverty. Admittedly, most countries have already been using these types of apps for a long period of time. Some countries have already used other methods
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 as installing security cameras around their accommodation to avoid being robbed. Owing to the fact that so much has already been done to anticipate crimes,
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 people cannot do much to prevent them anymore. The government of multiple developed countries have already tried multiple strategies.
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, it does not mean that laws are still being violated both severe and minor violations. To sum up, I personally believe that more work should be done to anticipate crimes on account of multiple reasons even though many procedures have been already taken.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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