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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.

#room #college #student #arrangement #study #work
Dear Mr Smith, I am writing to you
for
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 complaint about problems which
i
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I
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 faced in our room, which
is became
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cause
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a cause
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for
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 decreasing
productivities
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about
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 my study. I faced
with
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a lot of problems in our room like lack of electricity and the noise which
is
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came from outside. It makes
a
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little bit difficult to live there because there
disturb
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during
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me during
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doing
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my homework or job.
However
 sometimes without
electricity
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 it is difficult
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live
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 there because your heating system is
worth
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. So in my opinion there
a
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lot of ways to solve
this problems
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this problem
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 just you should think about it.
For
example
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 you can
seting
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setting
 up electricity on top of the building.
Also
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 you can buy
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a product
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product
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products
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 which can help
for
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reduce
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 noise which
is came
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comes
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 from outside. I am looking forward to your answer.
Your
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 faithfully George.
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