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Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because univerity education only benefit the students themselves not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #university #students #cost #studies #univerity #education #benefit #society
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The provided line graph illustrates the consumption of margarine,
low fat
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 and reduced spreads, and butter between 1981 to 2007. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that all of them had a downward trend, except low fat and reduced spreads. The figure for butter began the period at just over 140
grams
 in 1981, which was the highest consumption of all. There was an upward trend until 1986, followed by a rapid fall until the end of the graph. In marked contrast, low fat and reduced spreads stood at 10
grams
 in 1996 and were at the bottom of the graph,
however
,
it
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 increased exponentially, overtaking butter in 1998, and equalled
with
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margarine in 2001. After that, there was a slight fall until 2007, but it remained in
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first
 place. The data for margarine stood at 90
grams
 in 1981,
then
 there were fluctuations between 80 and 100
grams
 with a plateau of 100
grams
 until 1996, followed by a steady fall and finished the period with the lowest indicator of consumption.
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