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Q: Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on the problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

#q #trend #reports #media #focus #emergencies #development #people #individuals #society
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In the modern era , reporters are focusing on issues and emergencies as compared to good development . Few
masses
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 believe it is dangerous for society . I totally disagree with
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 statement and will discuss it in the upcoming paragraphs .
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focus
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 and foremost reason is awareness . To explain it , if people have information about the accident like how it could happen
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 they never try to do the same mistake that
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 serious danger .
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 , in the year , 2015 a survey was conducted by WHO which was indicating
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 by awareness through
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focus
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 help each other with the serious
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 that happen when it is telecast by reports on television
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 as floods or any disaster come in any nation
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 folks start donating money , as well as ,
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 for their recovery .
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focus
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 is wasteful. Sometimes individuals have some kind of serious illness when folks listen about any dangerous
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 try to attempt suicide.
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 , in the year , 2020 when covid came into the world news after
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this
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 many of illness people died due to the fear of
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 disease . But , if
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 have more
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 it is possible that ill
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 full from any serious kind of disease . In conclusion, awareness and guidance are more important for
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masses
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 to get safe , as well as, for strong
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 power which helps them to fight dangerous
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