Q: Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on the problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

In the modern era , reporters are focusing on issues and emergencies as compared to good development . Few
masses
believe it is dangerous for society . I totally disagree with
this
statement and will discuss it in the upcoming paragraphs .
To begin
with , the reasons for
media
focus
on the
problems
.
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and foremost reason is awareness . To explain it , if people have information about the accident like how it could happen
then
they never try to do the same mistake that
create
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serious danger .
For example
, in the year , 2015 a survey was conducted by WHO which was indicating
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%
accident
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rate
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by awareness through
media
focus
on
problems
.
Furthermore
,
masses
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help each other with the serious
problems
that happen when it is telecast by reports on television
such
as floods or any disaster come in any nation
then
folks start donating money , as well as ,
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for their recovery .
On the other hand
,
masses
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think
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media
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focus
on
problems
is wasteful. Sometimes individuals have some kind of serious illness when folks listen about any dangerous
problems
on any platform
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try to attempt suicide.
For instance
, in the year , 2020 when covid came into the world news after
listening
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this
many of illness people died due to the fear of
this
disease . But , if
media
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have more
focus
on
problems
then
it is possible that ill
masses
become
more safe
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full from any serious kind of disease . In conclusion, awareness and guidance are more important for
masses
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to get safe , as well as, for strong
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power which helps them to fight dangerous
illness
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media
.
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