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In the future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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With the advancement in technology, there is a notion that nobody will buy physical reading
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 as printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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 because they will be able to read whatever they want online without having to spend money. In my opinion, I partially agree with
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 statement and I will be discussing the pros and cons of
this
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. On the one hand, online reading is extremely beneficial to people who travel a lot. As long as a device is present, they can
access
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 anything they want from any location.
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, if a businessman is travelling for work and needs to
access
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 something urgently, he can immediately find the information needed on his device.
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, travelling already costs money,
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, people would prefer to spend their finances somewhere else, rather than spending on
newspapers
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 or
books
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 which they can
access
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 online for free.
On the other hand
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, the sales of physical reading
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 may not become obsolete
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 the health
risk
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risks
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 that online reading possesses. Constantly reading on a device can cause eye damage, resulting in having to wear glasses, especially for young children.
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, a habit of constantly reading a storybook online puts a strain on the eyes which can cause headaches or fatigueness.
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this
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, parents may prefer to buy their children physical reading
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 and to set the example, they themselves would read printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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. In conclusion, printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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 may not be of much importance in the future
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 the effortless
access
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 that online reading has.
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, using devices to read contributes to eye damage, making the physical reading
materials
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 more useful in
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 periods.
Therefore
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, I partially agree with
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 statement as there are some circumstances where printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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 will be required.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph connects seamlessly to the next to maintain the flow of ideas. Consider using more linking words or phrases to enhance coherence.
Task Achievement
While the examples provided are relevant, adding more specific data or studies could enhance the argument. Try to include a wider range of examples for a comprehensive response.
Introduction and Conclusion
The introduction and conclusion are clearly presented, providing a clear framework for the essay.
Supported Main Points
Relevant examples, such as the businessman accessing information while traveling, effectively illustrate the points discussed.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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