In some countries people’s weight has significantly increased while their levels of health have decreased. What do you think may be the causes of this problem and what solutions can you suggest solving them?

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modern era, the problem of obesity is increasing by leaps and bounds, and health level is decreasing by leaps and bounds. In my, opinion hustling and bustling of life and new types of

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will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriads of reasons which will

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argument but the most preponderant fact is the population is busy and they have to do multifarious work

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as jobs, and, feeding infants. They did not focus on their health. Another pivotal aspect is that technologies affect our body weight, and, physical appearance, for, example individuals did not use their feet and relies on

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vehicle.

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, fast food plays a vital role in obesity owing to the high numbers of calories is the main reason.

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, corruption in food manufacturing,

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use of hazardous materials in dishes for, instance a survey conducted by FSSAI revealed that pupils' favourite food package Maggie has

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harmless chemicals that stroke our hearts and tend to be

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, the high cost of gyms,

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could not afford these kinds of facilities.

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countless solutions that

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issue.

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, the most alarming one is the population is not fascinated by public parks.

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, the government should start a campaign to spread awareness around the region.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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In some countries people’s weight has significantly increased while their levels of health have decreased. What do you think may be the causes of this problem and what solutions can you suggest solving them?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some people think that using animal for experimental purpose is cruel but other people think it is necessary for development of science Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In some cities, public parks and open spaces are changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do you think the benefits outweigh the disadvantages?

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