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Many young people leave their own countries to work abroad. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working abroad and give your own opinion

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Working abroad has been a great choice for many young residents even though they have to leave their own nations.
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 essay will elaborate on both merit and demerit of
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 statement and I will give my personal opinion.
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 with, there is a drawback for those young
people
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 who
work
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 in other countries. They have to adapt to the working culture of a
country
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 which is very hustled. As a consequence, some of them who can not adapt should stop from their jobs.
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, Japan is one of the countries with a strict working culture which leads
people
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 to
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 harder than before. Some Indonesian workers who can not adapt to japan's working habits had resigned and back to their
country
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.
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 they earned a lot of money there, keeping a working-life balance is
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 important for them. On contrary, youngsters prefer to
work
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 overseas because they can get many benefits. Working in a developing
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 can provide them high
salary
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 than working in their own countries.
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, Indonesian youth are keen on working in Australia with a working holiday visa, because that opportunity provides a job with a 3 billion rupiah
salary
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 in a day which is the same as a monthly
salary
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 in Indonesia. Indeed, they have to adapt to barriers
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 as different languages and weather.
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, they can be accustomed to working in that
country
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. In my point of view, not only does working in a big nation provide
people
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 with a high
salary
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, but it
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 provides them with good working experience and helps young
people
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 to ace a new language which will be good for their careers. In summary, while working overseas gives young
people
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 some benefits and drawbacks, it is a good decision since they can gain more
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 experience and learn a new language.
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