In recent years, responsible tourists have paid attention to preserving both the culture and the environment of the place they visit. However, some people say that it is impossible to be a responsible tourist. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the present era, a growing number of people
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around the world, it
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a trend.
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, some
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that it is tourists' responsibility to protect the civilization and surroundings of the destinations,
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,
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suggestion is impossible to keep. I strongly disagree with the statement. On the one hand, visitors are more likely to be responsible for the protection local environment as long as the governments can actively implement policies.
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, visitors are not daring to litter everywhere in Singapore since the harsh penalty launched by its government. Another similar example can be found in China. The government released a regulation about littering around at anyone, including visitors, who
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the rule may pay a fine.
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policies can force people to protect the local environment
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travelling.
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, how
culture
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can be valued and preserved depends on visitors’ awareness. If people had
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access to local cultures before their trip, they would
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of the importance of the civilization and would not destroy them on purpose.
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, if you searched the local history and
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or watched a documentary before travelling to the destination, you would be very aware of the cultural differences between your own
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and others,
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making you accountable for the prevention of the local civilization and history. In conclusion, based on the above evidence and analysis, tourists can be accountable for the preservation of the
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and the environment of the destinations through policies and beforehand information preparation.

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task achievement
Your introduction sets the scene well, but try to make a clearer thesis statement indicating your position. Instead of simply stating you disagree, elaborate on why you believe visitors can be responsible.
coherence and cohesion
In your paragraphs, the ideas flow generally well, but some connections between sentences could be stronger. Use linking words to enhance cohesion, particularly between main points and supporting details.
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While you provided examples to support your points, ensure they clearly relate to your argument about tourists being responsible. Consider adding more specific examples or elaborating on the existing ones to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic and presents a clear opinion, which is essential for a strong task response. You’ve demonstrated an understanding of both sides of the argument.
coherence and cohesion
The essay maintains logical paragraphs with distinct points, making it easy for readers to follow your line of reasoning. For the most part, each paragraph focuses on a central idea.
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