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Some people say it benefits students spending at least one year away before going to the university, do you agree or disagree?

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The gap
year
 has become a trend in recent years.
Therefore
, whether students should spend a minimum of one
year
 before attending university raises a lot of debate. I think it needs to be analyzed and decided on a case-by-case basis. On the one hand, those who are highly disciplined and motivated to learn can take a break before going to the academy, and they are very likely to pick up some practical
skills
 during the break, which can contribute to their future work.
Besides
, having a gap period can
also
 improve their social
skills
.
For example
, students can meet people coming from different cultural and economic backgrounds while spending time outside school, and after being exposed to
such
 an environment they would be able to understand the cultural differences,
thus
 accepting them.
This
 process can help them learn to stand in others’ shoes and cultivate empathy and improve their social
skills
 as well.
On the other hand
, there is no need to take a period break for people who do not like learning knowledge, since they may be unwilling to go to university after a long break.
For instance
, if a person takes a
year
 to travel around the world and be a vlogger before college, it is very likely for the person to decide to not continue his/her study at university, which may be due to the short-term money he/she earned or the fame he/she got. In conclusion, as discussed above, having a gap period(s) can not apply to all cases. For those who are equipped with high self-learning
skills
, it will bring a lot of benefits.
However
, for others, it is not necessary to spend a
year
 away before going to an educational institution.
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