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Some people think city planners should create more green spaces and plant trees. Others believe that they should focus on building new homes. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, more people live in industrial
cities
 than in rural
areas
.
Therefore
, there are a lot of issues considered by local governments regarding how to develop their
cities
. One of these questions is about whether city planners should build more green space and plant trees in towns or build more new
houses
.
Although
 the number of
houses
 and their affordability is a valid concern, I strongly believe that the number of green
areas
 and parks are the problems we should focus our attention on. Building new
houses
 might be seen as the main goal of every city or town. When a local government pays a lot of attention to construction dwellings they stimulate the supply of new ones and
therefore
 decrease their prices. Simply saying, the more
houses
 the city has, the more affordable they are.
Moreover
, affordable prices strongly influence one of the poorest classes in every country - their students, especially from rural
areas
. It is not a secret that rental payments comprise a large proportion of total students’ spending.
Consequently
, the lower the house price, the more people can afford to study. But despite these valid reasons, I think there are some other more important issues to be concerned about,
such
 as pollution and people’s rest. Green
areas
 or parks in
cities
 are the ones of that places where citizens can take a rest after a long and hard day, or spend time with their friends and family. So arranging more green space provides a better quality of citizen’s life.
Furthermore
, planting more trees makes the air in
cities
 cleaner, because trees consume carbon dioxide and emit oxygen, or simply saying, produce fresh air, which is, in my opinion, a more essential option for us living in
cities
 today. To conclude,
although
 housing affordability for different groups of our society is a quite significant issue, I believe that the air quality and the number of parks where people can spend their spare time are much better for everybody.
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