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Technology have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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Following the rapid development of new
technology
, the way
children
 spend their spare time has been altered.
This
 topic contains advantages and drawbacks.
This
 essay will conflict
both
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 views given. On the one hand, in terms of the negative side, internet addiction may lead to illness and a passive lifestyle. It is proven that keeping eyes on screens and consoles for a long period of time may put you at risk of poor vision, and headaches.
Secondly
,
technology
 may change
children
's lifestyles to having no movement and just sitting.
For instance
,
children
 with
technology
 addiction have fewer outdoor activities, which leads to laziness. 
On the other hand
, spending time on the internet includes some benefits, two of which will be explained.
Firstly
, advanced
technology
 offers us the chance to communicate with people from all around the world, and to have easy access to all types of information, which can make
children
 more brilliant.
For instance
,
instead
 of reading from historical books, they can step into virtual reality and experience historical events.
Also
,
children
 can now have access to online information on various subjects and interact with the subject’s experts for
further
 professional knowledge. In conclusion, despite
of
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the cons, with
technology
children
 have been given the chance to boost the quality of their life. I strongly believe that the advantages are more significant than the disadvantages.
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