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Some people think it is alright to spend money for their wants, such as a new car or the latest gadget. Others think it is better to save their money and only buy what they really need. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Give specific details and examples in your answer.

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Some
people
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 believe that self-rewarding after working hard
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 as buying a car or the latest gadget is appropriate to do.
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, others think that saving
money
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 and choosing the most useful thing to buy is wiser and more appropriate. For some
people
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, working hard is an element to fulfil their necessities, including indulging themselves through what we called as self-rewarding.
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 term appears as a manifestation of the work-life balance idea, where
people
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 tend to allocate some
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 from their salary to buy happiness.
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, after doing or completing a hard task with lots of burdens and sacrifices in work or etc,
people
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 celebrate their satisfying result by buying luxurious things like gadgets, jewellery, luxury brands or etc. It's usually done to appreciate their hard work and motivate themselves to be better at upcoming projects. On the other side, some
people
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 think that the
money
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 they get from working hard should be invested in the right sectors.
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 is a futuristic view within some
people
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's vision in order to guarantee their life after resigning or retiring from office.
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, after getting a huge profit from doing their job well, they save the
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 to invest or create a promising business like making an online shop, buying stocks, investing in real estate and etc.
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, these groups think that saving
money
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 is more profitable to gain two folds advantages, and
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 create a brighter prospect for their life. In a nutshell,
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 dichotomy has a strong reason. Those
people
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 who tend to self-rewarding, only want to appreciate and motivate themselves to be better performers in their future carrier and it can be accepted as long as it can make them become more productive. Whereas, for groups of
people
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 who tend to save their
money
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 to invest, or use their
money
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 in another emergency situation, their choices can be accepted as well as long as they've already known their priority and how to manage it. I believe that choosing to spend
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 or to save it depends on our needs. So, it's not wise for us to judge one side related to
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