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Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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A generation ago,
people
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 were used to being close to each other very much by helping each other in any situation.
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,
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 flow is now diminished every day from the culture and the
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people
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 live. In
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 essay, I will look at the core reasons for
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 and propose some solid solutions. One of the main causes of the
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 is that there are no monthly meetings. By
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 I mean, Meetings can give chance to see one another face recognize.
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, big states have now a massive amount of skyscrapers, where
people
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 don't get a chance to meet anyone. The solution is for the tall buildings need to have a monthly meeting so that living
people
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 can get connect with new
people
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 once a month.Another
problem
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 is that wealthy
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 have much ego.
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 is to say,
people
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 who are rich don't want to friendship with the low levels families. To tackle
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 issue, Human has to be purified or throw their arrogance and make a new relationship with their neighbours without looking to wealth. A
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 cause of the
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 is the activities which were not usually seen in communities.To be more precise. By doing early exercise
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 will get the opportunity to talk with random
people
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 who belong to their areas.
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, anytime they will freely ask for help or anything from their neighbours,frequently. The way forward could be to add some regular activities in society's life. To sum up, taking workloads is a main obstacle for the neighbours to keep in touch with each other. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the
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 lies with
people
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 themselves to overcome
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 problems.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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