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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In today's globalized world, supermarkets in many countries make groceries from all over the world easily accessible to
people
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. Buying
food
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 has become more convenient than ever with the expansion of global
markets
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. In my opinion, the advantages of purchasing
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 from international
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 outweigh the drawbacks,
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 it may have negative effects on local sellers.
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 development. One major advantage of buying
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 from global
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 is the accessibility of exotic fruits and ingredients throughout the year.
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 accessibility allows individuals to enjoy a wide variety of meals conveniently, regardless of the season.
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, in Europe, tropical fruits
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 as pineapples and mangoes are available to
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 even during the winter.
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 not only enhances the experience of exploring new tastes but
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 helps
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 learn about other cultures through their cuisines.
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, global trade ensures a supply of essential items.
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, if local production faces challenges
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 weather issues, governments can rely on international trade to meet the demands of their citizens. Another benefit for
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 of existing these
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 in cities is related to the cost of
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. Buying items from local stores has many problems
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 as the cost of transitions to these places being dramatically expensive,
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, all types of cuisines are not easily available for humans.
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, preparing production from local stores is hard.
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, local
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 who live in rural areas will see economic issues
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 decreasing the demand for their products
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 global
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.
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, it is better for a farmer who produces vegetables to sell his products by himself but if he can not have his own sale he has to give all vegetables to the
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 cheaper.
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,
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 would be better for
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 to access fresh meals near their houses at a cheaper cost but we can see bad
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 are coming for farmers
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this
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 subject. In conclusion, in today's globalized world, hypermarkets produce fresh and variety of foods for
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 in the easiest way. The benefits of accessing these
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 are many, and today they help
people
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 to provide their
food
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 ingredients more easily and quickly.

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task achievement
While the essay covers both positive and negative aspects, it could further elaborate on the negative impacts on local economies and explore potential solutions or compromises.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a consistent and smooth flow between paragraphs, especially transitioning from discussing benefits to challenges.
task achievement
Refine the use of language for clarity. Avoid repetition and ensure that arguments are not only mentioned but well-substantiated.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly sets up the essay's topic and states a balanced opinion, anticipating a discussion of both positive and negative aspects.
logical structure
The essay outlines a logical structure with dedicated paragraphs for different facets of the argument, maintaining coherence throughout.
supported main points
Good use of examples like the availability of tropical fruits in Europe to illustrate points, making the argument more relatable and tangible.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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