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Some health problems are directly linked to people’s life choices. Why do people make these choices? What can be done to encourage them to make healthier choices instead?

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It is hard to question the influence of
people
’s lifestyles on their health.
However
, not many of them are trying to change the way they live. In
this
 essay reasons for
such
behavior
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 will be considered and some possible solutions, as I see them, will
also
 be presented. There are two main destructive life choices, in my opinion, that
people
 make. The
first
 one is a sedentary lifestyle and the
second
 is eating not healthy
food
. Nowadays
people
 are forced to live a sedentary lifestyle. Most of them would not do it, but the most paid jobs demand them to sit from 8 to 10 hours a day in front of computers. Eating not healthy
food
,
on the contrary
, in most cases is related to laziness and the desire to consume tasty
food
. It is evident, that eating good
food
 demands some effort when junk
food
 is always easy to buy. Because these reasons can not be solved without extra effort, without any doubts, the government should encourage
people
 to change their habits. I think that there are some simple steps that can be done to motivate
people
 to make healthier choices
instead
.
Firstly
, advertisements on TV can force
people
 to think about their lifestyles.
Secondly
, the wide range of affordable fitness clubs can increase the desire of
people
 to attend them. To conclude,
although
 these are quite hard problems to be tackled, I believe steps should be done in a way to change
people
’s lifestyles,
such
 as propaganda about sports and fitness.
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