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Some health problems are directly linked to people’s life choices. Why do people make these choices? What can be done to encourage them to make healthier choices instead?

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It is hard to question the influence of
people
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’s lifestyles on their health.
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, not many of them are trying to change the way they live. In
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 essay reasons for
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behavior
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 will be considered and some possible solutions, as I see them, will
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 be presented. There are two main destructive life choices, in my opinion, that
people
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 make. The
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 one is a sedentary lifestyle and the
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 is eating not healthy
food
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. Nowadays
people
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 are forced to live a sedentary lifestyle. Most of them would not do it, but the most paid jobs demand them to sit from 8 to 10 hours a day in front of computers. Eating not healthy
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,
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, in most cases is related to laziness and the desire to consume tasty
food
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. It is evident, that eating good
food
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 demands some effort when junk
food
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 is always easy to buy. Because these reasons can not be solved without extra effort, without any doubts, the government should encourage
people
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 to change their habits. I think that there are some simple steps that can be done to motivate
people
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 to make healthier choices
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.
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, advertisements on TV can force
people
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 to think about their lifestyles.
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, the wide range of affordable fitness clubs can increase the desire of
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 to attend them. To conclude,
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 these are quite hard problems to be tackled, I believe steps should be done in a way to change
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’s lifestyles,
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 as propaganda about sports and fitness.

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