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‎ Some young people leave the countryside to live in cities or towns, leaving only ‎older people in the countryside. What are the problems of this issue? What can ‎be done to solve this problem?‎

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Nowadays, some young adults are leaving rural towns to live in
cities
, leaving only the elderly in the
countryside
. In
this
 essay, I would explain the problems of
this
 issue and suggest solutions to solve these problems.
Firstly
, the main reason for youngers leaving the
countryside
 is the lack of infrastructure in the small towns. Some of the villages don't have a suitable water system, and even wastewater treatment is poor.
Due to
 these uncomfortable situations,
people
 are leaving the
countryside
.
For example
, the latest studies had found, using
the
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bio-degradable waste treatment and having clean water will increase
people
's satisfaction with their life quality.
Secondly
, young
people
 are not getting enough knowledge in
countryside
 schools. Because teachers are not educated enough or have less knowledge of foreign languages, compared to the pupils.
For example
, in our globalizing world, students have full access to the Internet by using their smartphones, but their teachers barely know how to prepare a Powerpoint presentation. Because of the teacher's poor skills, young
people
 are willing to move to the
cities
 in order to get a better education at higher-ranked institutes.
Finally
, in order to develop infrastructure and to get better-educated human resources. Government should develop a plan for wastewater treatment, and need to build better wastewater sewage systems. If, schools begin teacher exchange programs with city schools
countryside
school
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' teachers' education will increase. In conclusion, many young
people
 are moving to the
cities
, leaving only the elderly. The number of
people
 that are moving to
cities
 is growing year by year because poor infrastructures are decreasing their will to live in the
countryside
 ,
also
 school quality is a secondary problem. A better-structured village and a school
that is
 full of educated professionals will be the solutions to these problems.
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