Some think that young people should be free to choose any career they like, while others say that they should think more realistically about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the present age, whether working in your
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place or you should think more
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about your future
career
has sparked much debate. Some
people
assert that everyone should work somewhere
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their satisfaction,
whereas
many others argue that the perspective of their
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more important. Personally, I am in
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of the latter view. Convincing arguments can be made that working in arbitrary environments
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a beneficial effect on society. To start with,
people
who
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choose their
career
have job satisfaction.
In other words
, they never make a complaint about their
jobs
;
as a result
, they always have a sense of relief and satisfaction.
Moreover
, these employees have
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high self-confidence, because they exactly do their eligible job and they know how can manage when they face various problems;
therefore
they can easily promote
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positions.
Lastly
, life expectancy rise among these
people
.
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people
who have
jobs
in line with their own
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, don’t feel any stress and anxiety;
hence
, they aren’t liable to dangerous diseases. Admittedly,
people
who choose their
career
with
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to the future of that, sometimes are more successful. The reason for
this
is their logical choice. They think about all the pros and cons of
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career
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without
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their own interest. Even so, these workers have
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and through time
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performance may decrease significantly and they may make redundant. In summary, I would concede that practical choices of
career
have some advantages. Despite that, employees who choose their
jobs
freely have better performance and self-esteem.
Overall
, I am convinced that
people
should choose their
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job.
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