Some feel that school uniforms make schools safer for students, create a "level playing field" that reduces socioeconomic disparities and encourage children to focus on their studies rather than their clothes. Others say school uniforms infringe upon students' right to express their individuality, have no positive effect on behavior and academic achievement. Discuss both sides & give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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views and give my opinion in the conclusion. Today in almost every part of the world every

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even when they move out of

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as part of their religious practice.

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dress. On considering both the views of having

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