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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

#overpopulation #areas #two #ones #governments #individuals
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in
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the
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brick manufacturing. The process includes more than three stages beginning with collecting clay and ending with delivery.
To begin
 with, the clay is collected by
digger
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a digger
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 into
mental
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the mental
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 grid and
lowers
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to
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roller
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the roller
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, where the second stage begins. First , giving the form has two ways ,sand is mixed with water and the
mold making
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 process begins. Mixture puts to mould or wire cutter to obtain the
bricks
 which are dark in
color
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. After that
bricks
 are
putted
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 into
drying
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 oven for one or two days.
Then
 moderate them to 200-980c in the kiln.
Subsequently
, high
bricks
 to 870-1300c in the same kiln, at
this
 stage their
color
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 becomes a little lighter. Followed by cooling in the cooling chamber for two or three days and
return
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 to the same dark
color
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.
Finally
, after
all
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 stages, the
bricks
 are packed and sent for delivery.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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