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Some people believe that children should spend all their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

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Individuals are split when it comes to free
time
. Some people are of the belief that offspring should be with their family when they are in their spare
time
. Others,
on the contrary
, assert that spending all
children
's free hours with their parents and siblings could have some drawbacks and is completely unnecessary. There are valid arguments on both sides, which I will discuss and conclude by clearly stating my viewpoint on having more family in the spare
time
 of
children
. on the one hand, proponents of having all free
time
 without the family claim that,
this
 is completely unimportant,
also
 it could have many demerits for youngsters.
Initially
,
children
 who spend extra
time
 hanging out with their friends or peers are commonly more sociable and confident.
Moreover
, these offspring are not being stored by the parents,
therefore
 they can easily act in special situations without getting anxious. From another angle, opponents of excepting families from their
children
's leisure
time
,
conversely
 argue that,
firstly
, the family as a basic unit of society have a very important impact on
children
's behaviour as a future generation. More importantly, nowadays
due to
 newly born technologies which play an important role in separation between family members having some spare
time
 with each other could be very helpful in rebounding family members together. In conclusion, I tend to agree with spending free
time
 with family, since they have a more robust argument. It should not be forgotten that having some me-
time
 for
children
 to choose how they want to fill their hours is necessary either.
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