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n modern society, it is possible to go shopping, work and accommodate via the internet without face to face contact with one another. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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People have different views about the alternative forms of certain activities on the
Internet
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 in some ways it may seem that digital retailing, working and booking hotels at
home
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 are redundant inventions, I personally consider them innovative and useful. Some people believe that virtual shopping, working and accommodation is better to be done in person than sitting at
home
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. When going to stores, customers have an opportunity to try on the clothes or shoes, without having trouble with returning the goods after buying them online if they are not right-sized. The same applies to accommodation: a number of hotels offer guests a room tour in order to let them have a look and
then
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 make decisions. With online booking, there is no
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 an experience, and because some lodgings do not provide refund or room changing services, guests may be disappointed throughout their holiday because they have to stay in a room
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 unappealing to them. Moving on to working, it is more effective to work in offices, thinking from boss’s and employee’s perspective. Managers could keep an eye on the employees when they are sitting in the office, because if the workers are not doing work-related affairs, directors can chastise them in person, and an environment with working aura acts as a motivation for the employees.
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, when it comes to global problems,
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 as a pandemic, there is, undoubtedly, no other option than doing things at
home
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. In
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 case, going to the malls, commuting to work or, most importantly, travelling would be putting your health at risk, so the
Internet
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, in the past few years of COVID-19 pandemic, has been more valuable than ever. Everything was done at
home
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 with
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 access, and because of online shopping, some fashion bloggers or influencers had a way to purchase clothes for making their content on social media.
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, virtual shops saved them from losing their jobs. The same goes for working: without apps like Zoom, Skype or the
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 connection, a majority of people could have lost their jobs, and,
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, the companies could have faced bankruptcy.
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, accommodate via the
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 was the safest option back in the days of the virus outbreak, because
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 alternative could minimise the contact with each other, since the viruses are most commonly transmitted through the air. All in all, it seems to me that the
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 has become a vital part of human’s life, and the activities that can be done online, I believe, are truly convenient and useful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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