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buy punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. therefore life in prison in a better punishment for murders. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statemnet.

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I would argue that there is no difference between a murderer and a country that chooses the death penalty as a punishment for committing a crime.
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 two factors, I undoubtedly agree with keeping them in prison. First, because of the right to live for all humans, and
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, their families miss the chance of seeing them for a lifetime.
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, it cannot be denied that every single person should be commanded the right to decide for the primary part of their life called ( living ) which means society cannot make its own decision for killing them or not. Death is a part of nature.
people
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 are not allowed to change it and
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 call it(a rule ). United Nations should make these governments stop killing
people
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 because of their unethical rule. I believe that no one has the proper position to take
people
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's breaths because of their mistakes. The second reason is that every murderer has a family and someone to be concerned about. so it is true to say that if society makes someone stop living, undoubtedly it would have a significant effect on their family too, so indeed not only the criminal but
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 the whole family would get hurt
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 anyway.
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, too many lives destroy based on one illogical rule. Society should consider the effects on their close family,
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 as their mother and father. They know their child is in prison, but at least they hope to see them in prison once a week, so killing them is unnecessary when there is no danger or threat to other
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 is not necessary.
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, keeping murderers and criminals in jail is much more ethical than choosing the death penalty because of the right to live and their families.
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