Nowadays, the rights of young people are not respected. What solutions can you suggest?

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In most countries around the world,
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are recognised as persons by law.
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, because
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do not have the same access to power as adults, they lack the means to defend their
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. It is
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important that adults recognise the
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of young
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. Some argue that
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is uniquely the duty of parents. In my view,
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as a whole must bear some of
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responsibility. In
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I will outline three measures that can be taken to safeguard the
rights
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of young
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.
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,
government
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can ensure that its policies take the interests of
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into account. It could,
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, appoint a
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's commissioner to scrutinise new legislation for compliance with frameworks
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as the UN Convention on the
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of the Child.
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would ensure that young
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are continuously represented in the halls of power.
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, local
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and charities can ensure that young
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have access to independent confidential sources of help. Telephone
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are just one example of what could be done. One
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service in the UK, Childline, answered over 700,000 calls
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year, suggesting a strong need for
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kind of help. A third possible measure is to ensure that information about
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's
rights
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is widely disseminated through schools,
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, and the mass media.
Children
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who are well-informed about their
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are in a better position to seek help to defend them. In short,
society
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has an obligation to look after young
people
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. Doing so can have benefits for all. Young
people
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who have felt valued by
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are more likely to recognise the value of
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and behave
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rights
  • respected
  • laws and regulations
  • protect
  • educational programs
  • awareness campaigns
  • safe spaces
  • express
  • opinions
  • concerns
  • participation
  • decision-making processes
  • access
  • healthcare
  • mental health support
  • skills
  • opportunities
  • thrive
  • chosen fields
  • culture of respect
  • inclusivity
  • society
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