Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times in most people’s life others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Happiness is more important for every
life
of humans which are passing from childhood to oldest. ,
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Moreover
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we took a lot of enjoyment from our adolescent
life
and it becomes in fulfilled
to
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adult
life
. Mostly I believe that teenage
life
is more effective; who are spends those ways.
Firstly
, I want to discuss of younger aged
life
which we were passed from our
life
. We know kids learned different wisdom in childhood and they
also
suffered from mistakes; It helped them to make confident and successful humans.
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, after the exam ,
results
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we
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faced the condition of marks; those happened
due to
lack of practice but when they got some good suggestions from his/her teacher
then
they realise and got success in the next exam. So in my , opinion
thes
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this
younger
life
is grateful for every human
life
.
Secondly
, the vast majority of people argue that
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every stage of
life
has ups and downs
according to
the situation; the happiest moment comes with money, time and sacrifice.
this
combo of requirements can come in situations of
life
. For ,instance
this
life
we got economical freedom from parents
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them
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and do not ask for pocket money; they hangouts with friends outside and have long drives by car
then
they can not face any restrictions from their guardians.
To sum up
, for the whole file of segments we passed in different ways; we got
a different types
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of happiness in each section of
life
. I personally agree that adult
life
is most enjoyable for the whole of
life
.
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