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There are some motives for people to work. some people think that money is the most important do you agree or disagree

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In today's Perpetual transforming epoch. Job is an essential thing to live without any burden of life.
However
, there are few
motives
 for employees to
work
. few things that
money
 is vital rather than
motives
. I agree with the huge accent and I have given some agreement and disagreement sides in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with that agreement side of
this
 phenomenon, the first and foremost is
Money
 is the first thing to live
a better lives
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a better life
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.
In addition
, nowadays, without ,
money
 no one wants to communicate.If anyone has
money
 ,they can able to fulfil their needs without any difficulty .
Furthermore
 ,one person goes to
work
 and does hard
work
 with motive,if he cannot able to earn
money
 as do
work
, he or she ignores his
motives
 and may leave from particular
work
 .
For instance
,
the
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Indian 's
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 individuals always keep their focus on jobs to
earning
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money
 rather than
motives
 .So,
money
 is the most important in
job
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the job
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 rather than other things. Now taking into account of disagreement side of
this
 trend ,
firstly
, after earning some
money
 most individuals only concentrate
in
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 their
motives
 .
In other words
 ,after earning
lot
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a lot
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 of
money
, the lure of earning
money
 decreases .So, they
most
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must
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 follow their
motives
 and aid
for
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the nation.
For example
, Ratan Tata who is the owner of Tata Company and after earning a lot of
money
 ,he was not only aided in charity but
also
 give his
vehicles
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vehicle
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 free for
Corona
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Corona's
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 patience as an ambulance.
Furthermore
, not only is
money
 important for
work
 but
also
 satisfaction is one thing .If any person does not
gets
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 satisfaction and reputation in their company or is not happy with
work
 .They will leave their job
due to
 a lack of interest.
Therefore
,
motives
 are greater than
money
 in well-being. In conclusion,
money
 is essential for living smoothly flow well being but after earning some
money
 the greediness of a person keeps decreasing they mainly focus
in
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on
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 their motive.
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