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A friend has written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem in the past. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: tell your friend you understand the problem explain what happened to you in the past suggest a possible solution to this problem.

#friend #advice #work
Dear Roger, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. Guess what! I had the same problem which you
mensioned
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mentioned
 in your
last
 letter. As you know, the
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 of Product Manager gives
to
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you new challenges
everyday
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 and
calculate
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 your team capacity is one of them. In order to
dont't
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don't
 make
a mistakes
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 in your next month, you can
mensure
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measure
ensure
 the expectation of hours to deliver your demand and divide it by the sum of hours that your team can work during
this
 period.
Although
this
 math looks simple, it is necessary to consider that your employees don't produce 100% of the time
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they
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suppose
spouse
 to. What I mean
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 it is that during their days, there are pauses to eating,
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 to
bathroom
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 and so on. That was my mistake in the past, when I did
this
 analyse, I forgot
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 unproductive time, and because of it, the numbers said that I would need 50%
less
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 people to do the job. I look forward to hearing
you
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with
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your opinion and the result of your solution. Best regards, Franklin.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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