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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to be become a good sportsperson or musician. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Introduction
Globally, it is the notion that individuals are born with some unique sporting and art potentials
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 others have none,
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, some hold the view that all youngsters are capable of becoming excellent sportsmen or composers under the
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 of an instructor. I agree with the former .
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 essay will discuss both sides of the coin and an opinion from the writer.
Body paragraph 1
First and foremost ,considering the former and I, it is emphatically true in the sense that , those who have God-given abilities don't struggle to unfold or exhibit them when given the opportunity or in the display.
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, folks who do not possess any , show some difficulty when in a demonstration.
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, an artist like Jay Zee flows easily when performing , the reason being that his talent is inborn,
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 , 50cent shows signs of hitch because it's not an innate ability.
Body paragraph 2
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, teenagers can attain a level of good sportsmanship or vocalist under the instruction of an instructor.
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 is because the lads are good modellers . They easily follow any laid down rules you give them. They
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 give themselves to whatever they do without question ,unlike grown-ups. To illustrate my point, a survey conducted by ten coaches from 10 different Acadamy, reveals that , 80% out of 100% of kids who were not natural sportsmen have been able to learn and can be likened to naturally born sportsmen.
Conclusion
In conclusion , am of the opinion that, some individuals are supernaturally endowed with potential whilst others are not , but when young ones are given the room under proper facilitators they can become good.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position and provides an overview of the points you will discuss. Your conclusion should summarize your position and the main points you've made.
task response
Make sure to address all parts of the task prompt. State both views clearly and provide a balanced discussion of each. Use specific examples to support your points.
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