Some companies sponsor sports to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
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day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on whether or not the sponsorship
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the
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sport
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sector of some
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for gaining popularity has caused bad impacts.
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many people argue that
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has drawbacks, I am of the opinion that
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brings more benefits. On the one hand, it is said that the sponsorship
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sports
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of
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some
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has
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a disadvantage
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disadvantage
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because
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just brings benefits for the
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only. Specifically, the
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can invest with a little
money
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and become more famous through the media,
whereas
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the
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sport
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sector
receive
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appropriate profit.
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, many players and
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sport
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teams do not have enough
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and facilities to develop.
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, I believe that
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kind of sponsorship brings more advantages to the world of
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sport
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.
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,
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creates more chances of occupation. To be specific, when more
companies
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allocate
money
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for
sports
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, more and more people will attend in
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sector and play
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as a job,
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players can
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have a stable, high salary.
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, if the
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are able to sponsor
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sports
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with a huge amount of
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, they can organize the championships.
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, it may not only attract more tourists but
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help to advertise for the
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.
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, Viet Nam used to organize the SEA
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championship in the past. After the competition, the
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became well-known and many tourists return to
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country . In conclusion,
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there are many disagreements
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the given problem, I strongly argue that the investment in
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of the
companies
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for gaining fame has more advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sports sponsorship
  • financial support
  • athletes
  • brand visibility
  • awareness
  • commercialization
  • integrity
  • dependencies
  • corporate funds
  • unethical practices
  • strategic partnerships
  • communal relations
  • promote healthy lifestyles
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