The growing number of overweight  people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, being overweight becoming a real issue in our community.
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increased stress levels. Some believe that giving information about physical education in school will help mitigate the problem. In
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I will discuss whether I agree or disagree.
To begin
with, being overweight is often caused by the escalation of stress levels.
For instance
, my friend was overwhelmed by her thesis deadline
last
year. I knew her for a decade and she was a healthy-normal weight person, but
last
year she gained 20 kg in just 3 months. She told me that doing her thesis was so stressful that she needed an escape. One of many ways, she chose to eat. She could eat 5 times a day
while
trying to finish the work.
In other words
, gaining body mass is a sign that we are in an uncomfortable condition.
However
, if they are exposed to the right information about what to do when they are in an uncomfortable environment
then
being overweight is not an issue they should be worried about.
While
others believe that physical knowledge will help to reduce the issue, I believe that adding psychological knowledge will support the goal better. By combining these two curriculums we can help people to understand that physical and mental issues can affect our body in so many ways and what are solutions for those.
Additionally
, learning that we can take body exercises when stress hit us will help a lot of people to stay away from being overweight issues and build a healthier community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overweight
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • curriculum
  • health issues
  • obesity
  • strain
  • mandatory
  • long-term
  • well-rounded development
  • diet education
  • community sports
  • parental involvement
  • potential challenges
  • facilities
  • trained staff
  • case studies
  • public health
  • responsibility
  • individual choice
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