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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should read only those books that are about real events, real people, and established facts?

#people #books #events #facts
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Some
people
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 claim that multitudes want to read
according to
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events'
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books
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 than
fiction
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books
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.
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 is because it helps
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the ways of their lifestyle.
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, in my opinion, both of these
books
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 so beneficial. In the first place, there are myriad benefits of real
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.
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, it can help boost
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's
horizon
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, and
also
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, to be
self-confidence
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 and self-development.
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, it may cause enhance
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individual's lifestyle
according to
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 real events and real
people
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.
Besides
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, reading those
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 can reduce vital problems. When it comes to children who want to read
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 that
based
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are based
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 on a true story, it will be better for them.
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, it may be able to
well-informed
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 or living experience.
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,
fiction
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books
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 or magazines play an essential role in a kid's life.
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 provides
great
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 slope for a mind
thinking
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 creatively.
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, comic
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 will disappear
as well as
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 animated films and
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 movies.
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 will be harmful
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young
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the young
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.
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, it may cause relate
them
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themselves
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 to
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 world or fake
people
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.
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, reading those
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 or watching those films can cause to
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the population
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 to be narrow-minded or open-minded. It will impact
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them in different ways. And
also
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,
people
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 may addict to
think
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thinking
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 positively or negatively. In conclusion, I think the two of these
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 are useful. But,
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books
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is
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 a little bit noxious, and as you know,
people
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 need miracles.
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 why they want to read both of these
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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