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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should read only those books that are about real events, real people, and established facts?

#people #books #events #facts
Some
people
 claim that multitudes want to read
according to
 real
events'
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books
 than
fiction
books
.
This
 is because it helps
to
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the ways of their lifestyle.
However
, in my opinion, both of these
books
 so beneficial. In the first place, there are myriad benefits of real
books
.
For example
, it can help boost
people
's
horizon
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horizons
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, and
also
, to be
self-confidence
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 and self-development.
Furthermore
, it may cause enhance
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individual's lifestyle
according to
 real events and real
people
.
Besides
, reading those
books
 can reduce vital problems. When it comes to children who want to read
books
 that
based
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 on a true story, it will be better for them.
For instance
, it may be able to
well-informed
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 or living experience.
However
,
fiction
books
 or magazines play an essential role in a kid's life.
This
 is because
fiction
 provides
great
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 slope for a mind
thinking
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 creatively.
In addition
, comic
books
 will disappear
as well as
 animated films and
fiction
 movies.
This
 will be harmful
for
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young
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the young
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.
For instance
, it may cause relate
them
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themselves
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 to
fake
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a fake
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 world or fake
people
.
Moreover
, reading those
books
 or watching those films can cause to
population
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the population
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 to be narrow-minded or open-minded. It will impact
on
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them in different ways. And
also
,
people
 may addict to
think
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thinking
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 positively or negatively. In conclusion, I think the two of these
books
 are useful. But,
fiction
books
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is
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 a little bit noxious, and as you know,
people
 need miracles.
That is
 why they want to read both of these
books
.
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