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Developing countries require international organization’s help. Some people prefer financial aid while others think practical aid and advice are better. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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Irrefutably true that developing
countries
 always need and depend on other nations so some masses think, their
countries
 should take only financial help but others believe that practical help and taking
advice
 are better options.
This
 essay will explain both views points
as well as
 my opinion. To strengthen my viewpoint, there are a number of nations which have intelligent and super minds of
people
 but they can not use them in big projects as their small money budget so if that
countries
 try to get financial help from other nations
then
 they can change it into a big income source.
For instance
, Japan, which country always take help from other
countries
 to open up big plants or factories and uses their technology and
people
 efforts there,
as a result
,
this
 country is on top in the whole world. Moving
further
 , nowadays everything depends on money so
this
 option is a great idea when
countries
 are going into a financial crisis. Apart from it, in
this
 era of inflation,
this
 gets rid of the worries of money of
people
 and encourages them to do
work
. On the flip side, practical help and
advice
 always help human beings to analyse
work
 and make sure about success in
work
.
This
 is because every person has a different theory and opinion which make sure
people
 before taking any chance or decisions on any
work
 or project.
For instance
, India took
advice
 from America in 1990 in order to open a car manufacturing plant.
As a result
, they got successful. To recapitulate,
although
,
advice
 and practical aid give better choices to start and do any
work
, I believe, financial help encourages poor
countries
 to start big projects.
Submitted by raiinderdeep on

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