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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The line charts above clearly reflect the dramatic changes in the percentage of
households
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 with electrical appliances and the amount of time spent on doing housework in
households
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, respectively, ranging from 1920 to 2019. As indicated in line chart one, there was a noticeable trend that an increasing number of
households
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 were measured with electrical appliances from 1920 to 2019. Especially, the proportion of
households
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 with refrigerators jumped from 0% to 90% sharply during the period from 1920 to 1960. At the same time, the changes in the rate of
households
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 with refrigerators and vacuum cleaners were steady. From 2000 to 2019,
households
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 relating to food containing and floor-sweeping were totally done by refrigerators and vacuum cleaners. In contrary, the percentage of
households
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 with washing machines drop slightly from 1960 to 1980 and steadily climb from 1980.
According to
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 line chart two, the number of hours of housework per week per household declined from 50h to 20h significantly until 1960, and
then
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 dip to 10h slowly by 2019. To be specific, we can see that the trend of the percentage of
households
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 with electrical appliances and the amount of time spent on doing housework in
households
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 is simultaneous in the past 100 years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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