The number of people who choose to get married is likely to be lower in the future than that is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Married is arguably one of the
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oldest
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that
ever
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been to happen in
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human history. In
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recent years, certain
of
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people
believed that younger generations are not interested anymore
to
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that tradition.
This
scenery could be seen in some developed
country
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countries
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like England,
USA
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, and Japan
due to
the plummeting of marital status. But, it is happening around the globe, or it is just in some
countries
? There are two main variables that are becoming
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determinant
variable
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variables
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of
marriage
.
Firstly
,
nation
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law is one of the
mosts
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major things to be considered for
people
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choices to
be marry
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their partner or not.
For instance
, some nations required their citizens to be married
first,
before could have a child.
Hence
,
people
that want to have a child in those
countries
should be married, and it
keep
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the
marriage
rates still high.
Second
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variable that definitely
have
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positive
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correlation with
marriage
is religion. In some religions, they prohibited men and women to have sex outside
marriage
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. In
more
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strict
case
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cases
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, in
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islam
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it is prohibited for couples to touch each other before
marriage
.
This
kind of
things
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makes religious
people
treat married as the only healthy way to have a relationship with the other gender.
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majority
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of religious
people
are
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still have
high
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likelihood to get married. In conclusion,
although
in
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some developed
countries
have shrinking
marriage
rates. Plenty of nations are still
treated
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this
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tradtitions
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traditions
tradition
as their necessities and married traditions
is
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still continued by their younger generations. Because of that, we can conclude that the amount of
people
that still want to
married
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is only declining in
few
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countries
, and in
the
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most
of
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places the
marriage
rates will
be remain
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even increasing.
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