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Nowadays, people across the world have access to a large number of online newspapers and magazines. Some people believe that printed newspapers and magazines will not exist in the near future. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the world today, information can be obtained easily with online
media
 like online newspapers and magazines, and many
of
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the
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people
 believe that printed
media
 will no longer be needed.
Although
 online
media
 brings great benefits, I would argue that I will disagree with
this
 opinion. Printed
Media
 like newspapers & magazines would be great benefits for
people
 who are not familiar with the current technologies, especially for the elderly. Printed
Media
 are
also
 easier & more comfortable to read, we do not need to scroll up & down and it can make our eyes hurt. With the existence of Printed
Media
, we do not need to worry about being scammed
from
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the
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advertisement in
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online
media
. For someone who is in Gap Technology, it will have great potential for scammers to
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 them to click the scam ads.
Also
, there are several cases in online
Media
 where
people
 need to log in
their
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 account first before they can read it. To be honest it can be really annoying at the same time and potentially be threatened by some hackers.
Although
 Printed
Media
 may not be popular in
this
 era, we must keep the existence of
this
 printed
Media
. Some of the
people
 in our country
still
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 get used to conventional
media
 and do not adapt
with
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 the current technology. Printed
Media
 will still exist in the future, but for
the
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 popularity itself, it might
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be
 decreasing.
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