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Some individuals say that mobile is unnecessary for a young group over other things that it's useful for young ones discuss both views and give your opinion

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In the past two decades, there has been an exponential increase in the number of young
people
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 who use
smartphones
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. Some parts of society believe that
phones
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 are unnecessary for the young group,
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 others think that
smartphones
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 could help youth in studying and socializing with their peers. Despite those beliefs, I think mobile devices are not really useful for youth and could lead them to addiction.
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,
people
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 believe that
smartphones
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 for younger
people
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 are unnecessary
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 the dangerous
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content
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 that could pop up. In
this
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 cutting-edge technology era, many advertisements which contain 18+
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 could appear on the screen of mobile easily without considering the age of the user. If the advertisement appears constantly, the negative message could possibly be absorbed by the younger brain and lead them to be exposed to much more
adult
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content
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.
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,
this
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adult
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content
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 that seems not really matters could be a dangerous threat to the younger.
However
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, some
people
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 think that facilitating their children with
phones
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 could help them to be more effective in their study activities and peers’ socialization. Providing many scientific resources,
smartphones
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 give ease of study for students to find much literature.
Smartphones
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also
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 could help them to discuss their homework through some online platforms.
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, with many useful features provided by a smartphone, students' learning process will be more effective and efficient. Based on my opinion,
smartphones
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, which provide many game features, could lead the user into addiction. The development of mobiles system could support the development of the applications,
such
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 as mobile
games
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.
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, with the newest feature of the
games
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, the younger will be digging more and more into them.
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 development could increase the time spent by the younger in the
games
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 until someday they will be addicted to them. Since the younger still could not control their own time management, letting them use mobile will be so dangerous. All in all, using mobile at a young age has two sides effects. On the one hand, younger who use cell
phones
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 in their daily activity could get many benefits
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 as eased access to academic material and connecting
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instantly to their friends.
On the other hand
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, adolescents could be affected and exposed to
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content
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 that not suppose to be shown yet.
In addition
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, younger
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 could be addicted to many
games
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 provided by
phones
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. To tackle
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, the government should pass a specific regulation about the limitation of
smartphones
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 used by younger.
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